She flew towards me in the flowing air
With an Icy look yet clothed in fire;A strange mix of fear and desire
Griped my soul , I stare, I perspire.
I got a glimpse of the moon lit face
So near yet miles afar;
So unreal yet there she was
A flickering lamp in the chilling air.
I strained my eyes but futile it was
As the moon was behind her now;
I kissed her shadow just before
She vanished with the wind.
She loved the wind and the wind loved me.
She loved the wind as the wind loved me.
(1991)
[Here Iam republishing a poem that was inspired by the American Poet Theodor Roethke. I had by chance come across an article about Roethke in 'Span' as a school boy. The imagery he had used in a poem had a deep effect on me and inspiried me to pen this poem.]
Nice photo..
ReplyDeleteennmaa yelutheerukaan paa!!!!
she blew away.....?
ReplyDeleteintense!
very good.. one and another aspect of life now in my page
ReplyDeletegood kavithai:)
ReplyDeletevaishnav is still in the underground. the best yet to get its first leaf out.
ReplyDelete"She loved the wind and the wind loved me.
ReplyDeleteShe loved the wind as the wind loved me."
super lines..very touching...lovely poem pa..:)))
Reminds me of Sita in Ramayana
ReplyDeleteCigarette - smoke?
ReplyDeleteNice picture. Send it to me. I would love to hang it in my living room above the fireplace.
rajesh..u dont need a fire place if u hang this pic...
ReplyDeleteAnon,
ReplyDeleteI will still keep my fireplace. I shall not light fire. Instead will hang this picture.
Ashok,
I just realized that it was not one of ur paintings.
Good one, eppadidhan nalal kavidhai ellam ezhudareengalo neenga ellam..
ReplyDeleteIt is a beautiful poem no doubt but you cannot call it a sonnet simply because it has fourteen lines. A sonnet has to have the rhyme scheme abba abba cde cde (Petrarchan) or abab cdcd efef gg (Shakespearean)
ReplyDeleteThe first stanza can be rearranged to that effect as an example..
The first line ends with "air"(a) and rhymes with last line-a "stare"(a) The second line ends with "fire"(b) and rhymes with third line "desire"(b)So the rhyme scheme is a,b,b,a for the first stanza.
"She flew towards me in the flowing air
With an Icy look yet clothed in fire;
A strange mix of fear and desire
Griped my soul and yet I stare."
a,b,a,b would be:
She flew towards me in the flowing air
With an Icy look yet clothed in fire;
Griped my soul and yet I stare
A strange mix of fear and desire.
The rest of the stanzas have to be rewritten to rhyme like a sonnet. Good luck! :)
Nice lines.
ReplyDelete(btw how come the comments are dated 2006?)
Beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant.
ReplyDeleteWoW, Ashok!!! What a beautiful poem. I love the imagery! Thank you for sharing another shiny, bright gem from your poetic archives :-) Great selection of art to accompany your brilliant words! Thanks for sharing this with us :-) I've never attempted to pen a sonnet other than the Fibonacci but have been trying to acquaint myself with other sonnet forms. They do appear to be very challenging!
ReplyDeleteOH, I do like this! Beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteI admire your writing skills!!
ReplyDeleteVery well written Ashok.Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThe moon lit face sure haunts you:)
ReplyDeleteBrilliant composition!
ReplyDeleteExcellent! Reading this for the second time... Newly.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful! Brilliant!
ReplyDeleteThe imagery is indeed stunning. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem. The photograph of the lady really embodies the sentiments :icy look clothed in fire,strange mix of fear and desire,glimpse of the moon lit face.......
ReplyDeletenice buddy:)
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery and nicely written.
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